Hi!
Nice translation, just a few things I noticed:
In "푸른 세계수와" 푸른 means green not blue, as it's part of a phrase refering to nature.
인생 네 컷 literally translates to "life four cuts" but it means a specific type of photobooth that gives you a set of 4 photos. It's also a name of a brand, but it just means "photobooth" in general.
Life4cuts - photobooths where you can get photos