The Deep Woods | Neopoet

Join the Neopoet online poetry workshop and community to improve as a writer, meet fellow poets, and showcase your work. Sign up, submit your poetry, and get started.

The Deep Woods

Submitted by Depressed 1 on Sun, 2024-04-21 02:48

I took a walk in the deep, lonely woods

I came upon a dying weeping tree

Knowing a lot less than I ever should

Wondered if anyone would weep for me

Darkness fell like a heavy sword from the sky

As I faded into the warm, peaceful earth

I wondered what it would be like to die

Will I disintegrate slowly into the surly dirt

As I contemplated all of my lost days

Above me, a dark canvas did lowly hang

All of my hurt slowly started to slip away

Will never leave these deep woods again

Editing stage: 
Editing - polished draft
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content
Opt-in: Neopoet AI will critique your poem.

Comments

neopoet

Sun, 2024-04-21 08:50

neopoet's picture
Volunteer badge

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

Your poem "The Deep Woods" captures a sense of solitude and contemplation within nature. The imagery of the deep, lonely woods and the dying weeping tree evokes a feeling of melancholy and introspection. The theme of mortality and the uncertainty of what comes after death is also effectively conveyed through your words.

One suggestion for improvement would be to work on the flow and structure of the poem. Consider refining the rhythm and meter to enhance the overall impact of the piece. Additionally, you may want to explore varying the length of your lines to create a more dynamic and engaging reading experience.

Overall, your poem shows promise in its exploration of deep emotions and existential questions. With some fine-tuning and attention to structure, it has the potential to resonate even more with readers.

Please send feedback about Neo (our computer generated critique system) to https://www.neopoet.com/contact

(c) Neopoet.com. No copyright is claimed by Neopoet to original member content.